Saturday, 28 December 2013

Tuesday, 17 December 2013

The Last Days Of School.........

The last days of school will be carrying,packing, and shifting I don't know what we are going to do. I wish we will get lockers and desks.

I would like to be doing all of this carrying but we get work and free  time I can't wait till my next class. I would like to watch our class get destroyed. I wonder what class I will be in next year.

Wednesday, 11 December 2013

Why I Want To Be An Ambassador

Hi Mrs Burt my name is Zane, Kaycee's brother and this is my story of why I want to be an ambassador.

I would like to be an ambassador because I like showing the world the stuff I do on my blog. The reason why i want to be an ambassador to represent Pt England School and make my family happy and I feel confident that I can do it. I would love to be an ambassador like my sister was.

It would be great to get a spot with the other ambassadors and I love presenting and talking. The job would be good for me because I talk loud and sometimes quiet but I can speak loud when you want me to. Please give me the opportunity to be an ambassador I will try my hardest.

Learn create share is my way of blogging like these math problems or other work problem's.

This is why i'd like to be an ambassador.

Wednesday, 4 December 2013

Monday, 2 December 2013

Spider Monkey

Title:  (Spider Monkey Who Kills People)


Purpose: To report and inform on a topic.

Audience: Readers of my blog, students and teachers at PES.

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Once upon a time in Australia there was a spider monkey that killed almost every human being. But one man had been travelling across the entire earth fighting those horrible animals and his name was Spartacus.

Spartacus was very strong and brave. When he finished killing all the beasts in U.S.A he got a call from Aussie It was Hugh Jackman he said there is a beast ruling our town and Spartacus said ok and and he went on his plane and headed for Australia and that spider monkey was still searching the houses and the building and he was really hungry Spartacus showed up.

Everyone was happy he came I mean Hugh Jackman he was waiting to see what the beast was thinking it was hard but when he figured out what he was thinking nothing. So he waited walking in circle and then the monkey thought attack and the started punching each other and then they brang out there guns Spartacus started shooting the beast ran away but came back trapping Spartacus got trapped with a spider web and ripped out straight away.

The battle went on for hours there were big hits small hits and then death Spartacus won with a broken arm and heel. They all came out of there hiding spots and cheered for him and then the world got better and the world was happy.

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