Once upon a time there was a little girl called little red riding hood she was going to go to her grandma because she was sick.
A kiss from her mother and saying don’t stop in the wood’s so off little red went in the wood she skipping along until she found some beautiful strawberries,big and juicy she was skipping along the path finding big strawberries when she finished she ran back to her basket and ran off again.
This time she ended up chasing a butterfly but as she was chasing the butterfly she got further away from the path when the butterfly flew away little red riding hood heard a low gruff voice talking to her, she turned around and saw yellow big beady eyes and knew that was the deadly wolf,(”now wait there don’t you think the wolf is going to eat her just listen”)the wolf said,where are you going little red said,to my grandmas the wolf asked is she alone yes shes at the end of the path ok by maybe we will see eachother again yes by.
When she found her way back to the path she got her basket and ran off the fox had reached grandmas house the fox knocked on the door and said, grandma trying to hide his gruff voice grandma said, come in the ran past the room and swallowed her up.
Finally little red riding hood got to grandma's house she knocked on the door saying grandma it’s me. The wolf quickly got dressed into her dress and sat on her bed saying come in dear. Little red riding hood said,what big ears you have better hear you my darling
what big hands you have the better to hug you my dear
What big teeth you have the better to eat you said the wolf so the wolf gobbled her up and then he was tired and full so he had a little nap.
The hunter was on the search for the wolf when he came to grandma's cottage he was going to ask for a drink but when he past the window he saw the wolf sleeping right there and he loaded his shotgun and bang shot in the head he went in and cut the wolf's stomach and found granny and little red just then little red’s mum came very worried and she said always stick to the path and walk fast.
The moral of the story is don't talk to stranger's and listen to you'r parent's.
This is a thorough (you covered everything) retelling Zane. You need to consider when to use commas and full stops! Some of your sentences are actually the whole paragraph in one sentence. Don't over use them!
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